Unit 2 sporting events單元學案

　　正：i saw an old man going out of city park and he was about to cross park road.　　誤：but the car ran off immediately instead of stopping to apologize to the man.　　正：but the driver drove off immediately instead of stopping to apologize to the man.　　誤：the park should charge the entrance fee.　　正：the entrance fee should be charged for parks.　　正：people should pay for the entrance fee if they go to the parks.　　（2）句子之間的邏輯關系不清　　誤：it hit the old man down but the driver, a woman, didn’t stop her car.　　finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away. the old man and i saw the car’s number. it’s ac864. the old man couldn’t move so i decided to help him.　　正：it hit the old man down but the driver, who was a woman, didn’t stop her car. finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away. fortunately, i saw the car’s number. it’s ac864. noticing the old man couldn’t move, i decided to help him.　　（3）過多的長句使句子復雜化，單一化。　　范例1　　修改前：　　a famous sportsman was giving a speech which was very interesting.　　修改后：　　a famous sportsman was giving a very interesting speech.　　范例2　　修改前　　it was about 7:15 am when i reached the place where was just opposite to the gate of the park. i saw a gentleman came out of the park. it seemed that he was ready to come across the road. suddenly a motorcar appeared in front of him. the car came from the 3rd street, which was driven extremely fast from north to south. when it turned right, it knocked down the gentleman. to my surprise, the driver in the yellow car, who was a lady, didn't stop for a while. instead, she drove away to west quickly. but fortunately, the gentleman, who was not badly hurt, and me still had time to recognize the number of the car. it was ac864.　　本文句式缺少變化，除了有幾處用詞錯誤外，復合句尤其是定語從句使用過多，使文章語言不簡潔。　　修改后：　　it was about 7:15 am when i reached the place opposite to the gate of the park. at the moment, i saw a gentleman coming out of the park. it seemed that he was ready to cross the road. suddenly a motorcar coming from the 3rd street appeared in front of him, running extremely fast from north to south. when it turned right, it knocked down the gentleman. to my surprise, the young lady the driver in the yellow car, didn’t stop for a while. instead, she drove away to the west quickly. fortunately, the gentleman was not badly hurt, and i still had time to note down the number of the car. it was ac864.